My parents
When my Dad gets sick he gets grumpy because it stings.
Sometimes my Mum cries because it aches.
when they're tired they yell.
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My parents like Breakfast in bed.
My lovely Mum likes it when me and my
Awesome brothers work together.
My busy dad appreciates a tidy room.
Remember to care for your parents.
by Troy Gibbons
year 5
room15
age 9
year 5
room15
age 9
Troy,
ReplyDeleteRoom 15 love the pictures you have used and the colour choice of the title. Maybe next time choose a darker colour for the rest of your font to make it easier to read.
It seems you may have forgotten to included your Learning Goal and Signs of Success this could be your next step when you publish in our blog again.. Room 15 will find it difficult to give you feedback without your goal.
From Room 15
troy,
ReplyDeleteI like the way you used descriptive language to describe your parents ; )
you also used cool coulers to outline your sentences to
you might need to make your fourth sentence a bit darker because it is a bit hard to read
from Brianna
troy,
ReplyDeleteI like the way you used descriptive language to describe your parents ; )
you also used cool coulers to outline your sentences to
you might need to make your fourth sentence a bit darker because it is a bit hard to read
from Brianna