Monday, May 25, 2015

LG: To persuade others to our point of view.
Signs of Success:
  • Hook in the audience.
  • Use persuasive sentence starters and words.
  • Use rhetorical questions.


Get Rid of Homework!!!
Why, why, why do I have to do homework?
In my personal opinion homework is the worst thing that could happen towards kids. It should be banned!
How does it feel to do homework every night? I strongly believe that it is the boringest thing you can do. Most of the time kids are just sitting at the table doing any homework!
I know teachers care about homework but you do it five hours a day at school! When we get home we do more homework, is brutal. We could be on the playstation reading about missions.
Kids leave their homework book at home on purpose and reckon they can lie, lie and lie some more. Some excuses include “I cant find it”,”It's broken” and lots more. It is kids choices to lie, but I know it is very appalling.
I hope i've convinced you enough to get rid of homework. I beg that you get rid of homework because it's boring, you do it at school not home, make up excuses and lots more. So are you going to get rid of homework??
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Cohen Fredrickson
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10 comments:

  1. AnonymousMay 25, 2015 at 9:30 PM

    Fabulous writing Cohen. You really hooked me in with your introduction. I also like the persuasive sentence starters and rhetorical questions you used. Remember to check your punctuation.

    Miss Wetini
    Room 5

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    1. AnonymousMay 27, 2015 at 1:43 PM

      thank you for your lovely comment

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    3. AnonymousJune 23, 2015 at 3:12 PM

      hi Cohen fabulous you hooked me in with your introduction.

      Cameron Murphy
      Room5

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    4. AnonymousJune 23, 2015 at 5:37 PM

      hi Cohen
      i like how you worked towards your goal
      you also hooked me in with your introduction
      next step i think you could use a bit more punctuation in your persuasive piece: )
      bye Brianna
      room 15
      age 10

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  2. AnonymousJune 18, 2015 at 3:34 PM

    I really like how you used strong words and I also like how you used great sentence starters. next step is to use more punctuation.

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  3. AnonymousJune 18, 2015 at 3:36 PM

    I really like how you hooked me in at the start.
    I also like how you backed up your sentences, but I think you could work on puncuation.

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  4. AnonymousJune 23, 2015 at 5:33 PM

    HI,
    I loved how you hooked me in with your hook in.I liked you used a rhetorical question.add more persuasive sentence starters and words.
    From astra

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  6. AnonymousSeptember 1, 2015 at 3:05 PM

    Hi cohen
    I was really hooked in at the start.And I agree we should not be given homework after all the work we do at school, if I was a teacher I would be persuaded to forget homework good job.I think a next step would be to use more rhetorical questions.
    from Jade
    room 5
    year 6

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